Invasion (Christian)

5 Feb


A supernatural alarm call…

Normally I would have been waking to my usual alarm, and slumping out of bed for my paper round. Today I wake up and I see a flash light, bright, almost blinding me. Next thing I knew, aliens were coming into my house seeking something. I ask them, trembling, “what do you want?” they reply “we want you”. I ran as fast as I could but they took me to their hovercraft and probed me for clues. They were looking for something they had hidden on Earth a long time ago. Something I had seen before.


6 Responses to “Invasion (Christian)”

  1. Julie Buckle February 5, 2013 at 10:03 pm #

    I love this – brilliant word choices, Christian. Well done.

  2. Miss Ashton February 5, 2013 at 10:46 pm #

    Great Work Christian! What was it that you had seen? I want to read more! Miss Ashton

  3. janeh271 February 6, 2013 at 3:34 pm #

    I love the opening, I can just see you slumping out of bed! I agree with Miss Ashton, I want to know what happens next.

  4. zari February 11, 2013 at 4:50 am #

    well done

  5. Mr Leatherdale [Team100wc] February 11, 2013 at 11:00 pm #

    What an exciting story, well done, Christian. I would love to know what the aliens were looking for and I hope the poor narrator didn’t suffer too much as they tried to find it. Be careful with the tense, you kept changing and it was a little hard to follow. The excellent adjectives made the story seem very real. Well done, I hope to read more of your writing.
    Me Leatherdale (Team 100wc)

  6. Lianne Allison February 13, 2013 at 9:38 pm #

    What a great story!

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