Ending the war – Cerise

5 Feb

100wcgu-72

Another entry for the 100 word challenge!

He woke up with a brilliant idea – he felt gloriously calm because he knew it would be a fresh start to end all this fighting and suffering. But the child was naive. He walked up to his room and closed the door. He slowly opened his record player and turned the music on – fast thundering music. It was really loud, but piercing through, he heard a gun shot. He went mad with anger, his face turned bright purple because he didn’t know what to do next. If music couldn’t stop the war, what could? He felt tears sting his eyes, but he knew he had to keep on trying.

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11 Responses to “Ending the war – Cerise”

  1. Julie Buckle February 5, 2013 at 10:06 pm #

    Oh. My. Word…Wow! Brilliant, Cerise! It made me go a bit goose-bumpy!

    • cerise parry May 28, 2013 at 7:23 am #

      thanks

  2. Miss Ashton February 5, 2013 at 10:56 pm #

    What a great piece of writing. I really want to know what is happening! Miss Ashton

    • cerise parry May 28, 2013 at 7:31 am #

      I didn’t get that much help writing it, and my attitude towards everything is now positive, it is a fresh start I think now.

  3. Ms Woodgate (Team 100WC) February 10, 2013 at 4:08 pm #

    Hello Cerise,
    What an amazing piece of writing. You have used vocabulary and punctuation to create a powerful scene. Very impressive. Keep up the good work. Well done.

  4. zari February 11, 2013 at 4:52 am #

    I got goose bumps it was amazing because the name and how you wrote the story

  5. Miss Loversidge February 13, 2013 at 10:21 pm #

    Well done Cerise – it is a very descriptive piece of writing, expressing the child’s emotions.

    • cerise wiles May 28, 2013 at 7:31 am #

      cool beans

  6. Miss Ryder February 14, 2013 at 8:11 am #

    Wow Cerise – well done! I never knew how well you could write. This shows fantastic imagination and I love the way everything seems bad but at the end he knows he has to keep trying. It’s a great message for all of us, isn’t it?

    • cerise parry May 28, 2013 at 7:28 am #

      I didn’t get that much help. But it is a message to everyone out there never stop trying if you do not try things out. you will never no what your really good at and I have just learnt that now.

  7. cerise wiles November 8, 2013 at 7:34 pm #

    I wish I was still doing inspire it was so much fun !

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